First Rough Cut

I showed the first rough cut of my film to my audience and collected some feedback with parts that I need to improve on. From these notes I have made a list of what I need to change/improve in the film.

Film Improvements

• Re-do shots with water on the lens
• Narrative needs to be clearer
• Use actual game footage of the screen for variety
• Change POV shots (remove most of the effects)
• Fade between POV and feet/head shots slower
• Get a higher variety of shots of protagonist gaming
• Get some shots of antagonist looking at house, seeing what number it is, with protagonist visible in the window.
• Give the antagonist a phone with address on
• Put in shot of protagonist from outside through the window
• Shot from inside with antagonist’s face in window (Downstairs bathroom)
• POV shots are too dark and grainy (maybe re-do when lighter)
• Shot of antagonist with knife of some sort to build suspense
• Make sure there aren’t any household items/ bins in shots which may ruin mise-en-scene
• Power failure- Antagonist breaks power box on outside of house (explains why power wont work)
• Get downstairs light to turn off in sync with power going off
• Increase volume level of sound effects

Shots to do

(Remove items that might be bad for mise-en-scene before doing any shots)

• All of the shots of Protagonist gaming (Over the shoulder, close up of hands, close up of face etc.), Film game footage (at the same time as filming the other shots for continuity)
• POV shots outside (Walk for a longer distance, show him looking through window, looking on phone.)
• OTS of antagonist looking at house address on phone
• Protagonist trying to turn light on, scared face when it doesn’t turn on
• Shots of antagonist looking at door number